batang_paslit ([info]batang_paslit) wrote in [info]gid_hanasheh,
2011-04-12 01:28:00
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some foreign shores yield answers

(Castiel at the brink of falling, and thinking of Dean)

some foreign shores yield answers:
spaces of absence
conversations held in confidence

the conch held to an ear echoes a vastness
both full and yawning, the one-sided trade
of the voice one longs to hear

the empty heart listening to the beating.

but the truth is i no longer know who it is
that waits on the distant sands
and holds cupped to an ear

a mouth always reassuring. perhaps you
are capable of remembering what it is
that i said, or have you always known

the sea prostrate at your feet?
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[info]zempasuchil

April 12 2011, 05:37:25 UTC 1 year ago

I reeeally like this poem. there are some stunning lines in here, basically I want to pick all the lines from "the empty heart" to the very end as my favorites. because OMG AUGH THE END *flails*

[info]batang_paslit

April 13 2011, 09:38:53 UTC 1 year ago

thank you :D

[info]gabby_silang

April 13 2011, 18:43:59 UTC 1 year ago

Oh my God, I really love this. You have such gorgeous phrasing, and such a knack for rhythm. This especially is exquisite:

but the truth is i no longer know who it is
that waits on the distant sands
and holds cupped to an ear

a mouth always reassuring.

Absolutely wonderful.

[info]batang_paslit

April 14 2011, 07:48:41 UTC 1 year ago

thanks! haven't written poetry in moooonths. it was a relief when i tried and something came out
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